Exposed – Friday Fictioneers

AnElephantCant contain himself
It is Friday Fictioneer time again
He must write a short tale
On a very small scale
He makes notes with his best fountain pen

What on earth can he find to say this week
What if he finds that he has writer’s block
That would be a pain
So to clear his poor brain
It makes sense to first go for a walk

The idea is to write a very short story based on a picture prompt (below).
That’s it.

Copyright -Douglas M. MacIlroy

Copyright -Douglas M. MacIlroy

He smiles to himself, although his heart is breaking.

How could that stupid, treacherous fool do that to the woman he loved?
The woman they both loved.

He does not know who tipped off the police, but they are everywhere.
They search the house, the barns, the outbuildings.
They know something is amiss.

The brute just stands there, pretending innocence, radiating grief.
While the third side of the triangle, her sister, dabs at her eyes with a scented handkerchief.

Time for action.
He moves the hosepipe, so that the water pours into the freshly dug ground, washing away the topsoil.

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72 Responses to Exposed – Friday Fictioneers

  1. Fantastic. Even without the pay-off, I loved the idea of altruistic pro bono security guards.


  2. annisik51 says:

    I like your use of ‘triangle’: in this case the eternal ‘ménage à trois’.


  3. kdillmanjones says:

    Creative story from the prompt!


  4. Oh that’s a smart horse 🙂


  5. Clever horse. And I thought he was watering the lawn!


  6. Shreyank says:

    Kudos on ur story and a bigger kudos to jules and you on the poetry routine ! enjoyed it 🙂


    • AnElephantCant hide his dismay here
      He spends several days creating his story
      Then in a brief flake of time
      Lovely Jules with a rhyme
      Steps in and steals all AnElephant’s glory!

      But, seriously (really?), very glad you enjoyed your visit.


      • Shreyank says:

        anelephant has met a formidable oponent
        anelephant trumpets loud and hard, but cant shake jules away
        we now know shreyank cant even make up a nursery ryhme
        and hence enjoys(really!) the banter of anelephants an’ jules ryhmes ! 🙂

        btw he also likes anelephant’s story ! 🙂


  7. Wonderful story. I love the depth of emotion of all involved.


  8. Beth Carter says:

    Wickedly nice and the start to a longer short story. Well done.


  9. elappleby says:

    Very very cleverly written. The story trips along nicely revealing the clues along the way. I especially like ‘the third side of the triangle’. Brilliant.


  10. Joe Owens says:

    The murderer never imagined the horse would be the weakest link of his plan.


  11. denmother says:

    Never underestimate a horse. I enjoyed how you cleverly wove him into the tale.


  12. zookyworld says:

    What a neat story you came up with for this photo. And such a clever horse!


  13. Dear Elephant,
    Quite a tale, or is that tail, you’ve woven. A good ride and a good read.


  14. nightlake says:

    Brilliant! Clever horse.


  15. indytony says:

    Well conceived and crafted. I particularly enjoyed your rhyming intro.


  16. julespaige says:

    Glory in Gory

    AnElephantCant say he isn’t clever
    To tell a mystery in one hundred words
    The horse content to expose the fiends
    Greedy ‘bird’ and fella won’t get all the beans
    Thank goodness the prompt was not of birds

    As I imagine them, the sky full of vultures
    Worse than ducks a squawking
    Police, Detectives and M.E. too –
    Body’ll be less a few pieces parts for you…
    Lady fingers for dinner – those scavengers are stalking!




  17. jwdwrites says:

    Very good! Great use of what wasn’t said. I loved the horse washing away the top soil. With any luck they will find her and he will get what he deserves. I am guessing that the sister was involved?


  18. elmowrites says:

    Sounds like this triangle was actually a square! Glad the brute will get his justdesserts.


  19. animals are so smart, love this tale.


  20. Penny L Howe says:

    Wow, just brilliant, what a clever idea for the photo prompt! 🙂 xx


  21. Sandra says:

    What a great idea! Well done


  22. An elephant writing about a horse who’s about to uncover a murder. Now that’s something!



  23. Nice twist for the photo prompt.


  24. kz says:

    clever horse ^^ clever tale ^^ well done


  25. emmylgant says:

    …He knows where all the bodies are buried. Very imaginative and ingenious.


  26. ohhh I cannot wait until the second chapter of this mystery! 😉


  27. Alastair says:

    Cool. I like that


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