AnElephantCant make a rhyme this week
And his story has double the words
So you can poo poo him
You can even sue him
Or just read every second verse
The idea is to write a very short story, circa 100 words, based on a picture prompt (below).
There are nearly a thousand Tupperware things
I’ve no idea what they are for
There are pins and clips and bottles of stuff
That never get used any more
There is coffee and milk and sugar and tea
There is Vodka and there’s Irn Bru
I never drink any of these bittersweet things
They just sit here waiting for you
There are snacks in the freezer and up on the shelf
I could mix them into a sad stew
There are packets and cartons and tins of strange things
That sit here just waiting for you
Then there’s me and my face and my brain and my smile
And my eyes that grow daily more blue
There’s my heart and my soul and my life and my love
Just sitting, just waiting for you
There’s a pillow on the bed that always stays clean
There is a TV that doesn’t get watched
There are lamps that remain forever unlit
Isn’t it sad when a life has been botched
There’s a man going off to a place far away
Where he knows he will never see you
There are tears running down an old crumpled face
There’s a heart that is broken in two
You got my attention with the Tupperware line and I followed the trail of tears from there.
Thanks, Russell, good to know it got to you.
This was very sad and moving, Elephant. You can feel sorry for the tearful man
So glad it spoke to you.
If it touches your emotions then it is all worthwhile.
Very poignant. Not a word wasted. Really enjoyed it.
Thank you, Sarah Ann, high praise indeed.
Very happy heffelump.
This is heart warming.. Like your unique style!
Thank you so much.
Very pleased you found this to your taste.
Anelephant say he can’t ryhme
but his story has brought tears
with ideas conveyed so clear ! cheers
He says time after time
But please no more tears
It only appears
That things have got worse
But it is just a verse
He is glad you enjoyed
The approach he employed
My thought goes to a parent, a father perhaps, watching his son go off to war.
I really enjoy your way of telling stories in verse.
Thank you for your visit. Wipe away those tears on your lovely face –
You are admired by many and me too. So hard to take the fiction away from the author.
On April first I am putting a series of ELFantasy, acrostic Elfje all together on my blog spot place here:
A different type of story…
Thank you for your thoughtful comments.
Happy that you like the somewhat erratic style.
Face neither lovely nor tear-stained!
Will check out link.
Wondering if April 1 is apposite.
Suitable for the series… If mortals be fools, maybe.
an elephant just made me sad.. 😦
well done.. the extra words were fine. and nope, i won’t poo poo you ^^
No poo poo
From KZ who
Should not be sad
Not even a tad
If you know him
It is only a poem
So thank you
For what you do
AnElephant always writes with so much panache! Weaving words in a rhythmic way that always pulls me in…be it whimsy or the more serious side…Yes… I am happy to once again be visiting my favorite Elephant (even if he can’t count to 100 😉 )!! Hugs ~
When lovely Christina comes and flatters
AnElephant likes to answer in rhyme
But she says his arithmetic
Is somewhat pathetic
So he counts his blessings and responds with a mime
Once again I must agree with another
Yes, Emmy expresses it best
It’s written so well
This story you tell
Not too many at all with the rest! (of the words, lol)
Penny is charming and agreeable
She always says something nice
Penny is charming and agreeable
AnElephant just says these words twice
What was that you said again?
Good rhythm and rhyme and you’ve successfully captured the emotions of the speaker. Nice.
It is good to get a comment on the writing!
Glad you enjoyed.
This is so sad
Made me feel bad
But I’d never poo poo
An elephant who…….
Please don’t feel sad
AnElephant is glad
You don’t poo poo
What he likes to do
There are beautiful things that need no words at all
There are others that need a few
Sometimes a beautiful story needs all the words it takes to tell it.
Thank you AnElephant for breaking the rules.
He makes rules of his own
He never treats anything
As being set in stone
An Elephantcant did good but poo poo for not keeping the 100 word count. 🙂
AnElephant is happy
You think he did fine
He considers the word count
Not a rule but guideline
I know…but I like the challenge myself. I think it tunes my writing skill. To tell a complete story in just 100 words. Didn’t mean to offend.
AnElephantCant take offence
At lovely SilentlyHeardOnce
In his defence
He never makes too much sense
He clearly is a bit of a dunce
No An ElephantCant is no dunce. SilentlyHeardOnce can be a little over sensitive at time. Sometimes I say the wrong things. 😦
I give up…
Fetch, boy, fetch
Where is your stick?
Bulldog is just learning
The rhyming trick
Tilde’s going to be late for work!
AnElephant’s not bound to sense.
His FF must’ve made him tense.
His introductory non-rhyme,
While apropos at the time,
Fit the mood at silly’s expense!
Or not. It does amplify the effect of the short story. 🙂
A tilde employed?
Don’t be annoyed
Or no quick rhyme
For that busy sign
AnElephant has written another great F.F
He went over the 100 but we can see why
The poor little lad
Is ever so sad
In a story that can easily make you cry
Please don’t weep
When he is asleep