Waiting – Friday Fictioneers

Friday Fictioneers

AnElephantCant make a rhyme this week
And his story has double the words
So you can poo poo him
You can even sue him
Or just read every second verse

The idea is to write a very short story, circa 100 words, based on a picture prompt (below).
That’s it.

Copyright – Rochelle Wisoff-Fields

Copyright – Rochelle Wisoff-Fields

There are nearly a thousand Tupperware things
I’ve no idea what they are for
There are pins and clips and bottles of stuff
That never get used any more

There is coffee and milk and sugar and tea
There is Vodka and there’s Irn Bru
I never drink any of these bittersweet things
They just sit here waiting for you

There are snacks in the freezer and up on the shelf
I could mix them into a sad stew
There are packets and cartons and tins of strange things
That sit here just waiting for you

Then there’s me and my face and my brain and my smile
And my eyes that grow daily more blue
There’s my heart and my soul and my life and my love
Just sitting, just waiting for you

There’s a pillow on the bed that always stays clean
There is a TV that doesn’t get watched
There are lamps that remain forever unlit
Isn’t it sad when a life has been botched

There’s a man going off to a place far away
Where he knows he will never see you
There are tears running down an old crumpled face
There’s a heart that is broken in two

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38 Responses to Waiting – Friday Fictioneers

  1. rgayer55 says:

    You got my attention with the Tupperware line and I followed the trail of tears from there.


  2. nightlake says:

    This was very sad and moving, Elephant. You can feel sorry for the tearful man


  3. Sarah Ann says:

    Very poignant. Not a word wasted. Really enjoyed it.


  4. Parul says:

    This is heart warming.. Like your unique style!


  5. Shreyank says:

    Anelephant say he can’t ryhme
    but his story has brought tears
    with ideas conveyed so clear ! cheers


    • AnElephantCant rhyme
      He says time after time
      But please no more tears
      It only appears
      That things have got worse
      But it is just a verse
      He is glad you enjoyed
      The approach he employed


  6. julespaige says:

    My thought goes to a parent, a father perhaps, watching his son go off to war.
    I really enjoy your way of telling stories in verse.

    Thank you for your visit. Wipe away those tears on your lovely face –
    You are admired by many and me too. So hard to take the fiction away from the author.

    On April first I am putting a series of ELFantasy, acrostic Elfje all together on my blog spot place here:
    A different type of story…


  7. kz says:

    an elephant just made me sad.. 😦
    well done.. the extra words were fine. and nope, i won’t poo poo you ^^


  8. Christina ~ says:

    AnElephant always writes with so much panache! Weaving words in a rhythmic way that always pulls me in…be it whimsy or the more serious side…Yes… I am happy to once again be visiting my favorite Elephant (even if he can’t count to 100 😉 )!! Hugs ~


    • When lovely Christina comes and flatters
      AnElephant likes to answer in rhyme
      But she says his arithmetic
      Is somewhat pathetic
      So he counts his blessings and responds with a mime


  9. Penny L Howe says:

    Once again I must agree with another
    Yes, Emmy expresses it best
    It’s written so well
    This story you tell
    Not too many at all with the rest! (of the words, lol)


  10. vbholmes says:

    Good rhythm and rhyme and you’ve successfully captured the emotions of the speaker. Nice.


  11. adinparadise says:

    This is so sad
    Made me feel bad
    But I’d never poo poo
    An elephant who…….


  12. emmylgant says:

    There are beautiful things that need no words at all
    There are others that need a few
    Sometimes a beautiful story needs all the words it takes to tell it.
    Thank you AnElephant for breaking the rules.


  13. An Elephantcant did good but poo poo for not keeping the 100 word count. 🙂


  14. bulldog says:

    I give up…


  15. Matilda Aya says:

    Tilde’s going to be late for work!
    AnElephant’s not bound to sense.
    His FF must’ve made him tense.
    His introductory non-rhyme,
    While apropos at the time,
    Fit the mood at silly’s expense!

    Or not. It does amplify the effect of the short story. 🙂


  16. Alastair says:

    AnElephant has written another great F.F
    He went over the 100 but we can see why
    The poor little lad
    Is ever so sad
    In a story that can easily make you cry


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