Rock Pool – Friday Fictioneers

AnElephantCant try any harder
He hopes his stories are never inferior
They have been a bit sad
So this week he is glad
To say he has written something a bit cheerier!

The idea of Friday Fictioneers is to write a very short story (100 words) based on a picture prompt (below).
That’s it.

Wasp Nest : Copyright - Janet Webb

Wasp Nest : Copyright – Janet Webb

Rock Pool

Hurry, Grandpa, there might be crabs in this one.
Oops, I just put my foot in there, I’m all wet!
And look at that funny thing, it looks like a sponge, is it a sponge?
Oh, is it?
Why is there a wasp nest on the beach?
Do you know everything, Grandpa?
I’m going to look in here for crabs.
Oh, look, fish, lots of little fish!
There might be crabs under this rock, it’s quite big.
Will you help me please, Grandpa?
It’s a bit heavy and I’ve got my feet all wet again!
Where …..?


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71 Responses to Rock Pool – Friday Fictioneers

  1. jwdwrites says:

    Poor Grandpa, he will be sorely missed. 🙂


  2. Linda Vernon says:

    Poor Gramps! Well he was a good sport til the end.


  3. neenslewy says:

    Always a great read. Believable narration.


  4. kdillmanjones says:

    Poor kid!


  5. elappleby says:

    I loved hearing just the one side of the dialogue. Very interesting. Also sweet poem for your intro 🙂


  6. Lily Mugford says:

    you left us hanging, now we have to imagine our own ending…


  7. kz says:

    uh-oh hahaha don;t worry, your stories are never inferior. and your fun elephant images rock ^^


  8. 40again says:

    Loved your story, believable dialogue, great ending


  9. Willow says:

    Loved it! You are so talented!


  10. julespaige says:

    I’m thinking grampa was just in a beach chair and fell asleep between the chatter box and rolling waves. That’s my take and until otherwise I’m sticking to it!


  11. Mystikel says:

    Awwww. My heart went out to that little guy. Very believable dialogue. I could just hear him chattering away like that.


  12. EagleAye says:

    Oh poor grandpa. I’m guessing the wasps got him. That’s hard on a kid, trying to enjoy the beach.


  13. denmother says:

    I really enjoyed the energy of the child in this one!


  14. Jan Brown says:

    Oh, dear! I hope it was just the pincer of a crab that got poor gramps!


  15. A day that child won’t soon forget. Believable dialogue from the mouth of a babe.
    Good job.


  16. Shreyank says:

    poor grandpa.. !


  17. zookyworld says:

    Oh no! Not Grandpa! With killer crabs and wasps, that beach is a dangerous place.


  18. TheImaginator says:

    Thought you said it would be cheerier? 😉


  19. Sandra says:

    Very effective with the ending left open like that. Nicely done


  20. Carrie says:

    Ack, did a crab get Grandpa??

    Love the stream of consciousness aspect of the child’s dialogue


  21. Penny L Howe says:

    One could hope that would never happen! Well written! 🙂


  22. kingsleycw13 says:

    The inquisitiveness and then the sudden realisation of what’s actually happening, crashing into their little world – love it!


  23. I agree that the open ending adds to the story. I can just hear the child prattling along to his/herself and then suddenly…



  24. Poor grandpa… love the monologue…


  25. Nifti says:

    Haha, I enjoyed the intro… cheerier really? Where is Grandpa?!! 🙂


  26. awwwww love this one… but where’s grandpa??


  27. Poor grandpa swept away or stung
    you ,very creative one, leave this wonderful opening for the imagination to soar

    have a happy day!!!!


  28. Joe Owens says:

    I wonder if Grandpa is just trying to catch up. I will go with that theory. However it is this seems realistic.


  29. Alastair says:

    Haha! Love it.


  30. Poor kid. Did the grandfather get stung or just have a heart attack?


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