A Roof with a View – Alastair’s Photo Fiction

 AnElephantCant do the Danse Macabre
He decides to abandon that genre
To lighten the mood
He feels that he should
Do a twirl and sing a silly wee song

 See here for Alastair’s Blog, the picture below is this week’s prompt.

Copyright Alastair Forbes

Copyright Alastair Forbes

Roof with a View

Her smile is radiant.
How did you find this place, darling, you are so clever!

He smiles back at his new bride, perhaps less sincerely.
Friend of a friend, you know. It pays to have contacts.

She is thrilled.
What a wonderful view, the clouds are so beautiful!

His smile grows wider
Yes, my sweet. And from over here you can see France.

Pointing across the Channel, he guides her to the edge, his hand in the small of her back.
She claps her hands, leans forward.
Ooh, yes, I am so excited, I can picture Paris already!

The pressure on her back increases.
He thrusts his hand forward abruptly.
She is no longer there.

He lurches forward in surprise, turning his head to where she now stands.
He is already falling towards the rocks, sixty feet below.

Her smile is radiant.
How did you find this place, darling, you are so clever!

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27 Responses to A Roof with a View – Alastair’s Photo Fiction

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  2. dreaminofobx says:

    I did not see that she would be even more devious than he! Love to be surprised by an ending…kudos for creating such a thorough misdirection in so few words!


  3. I prefer to think the female lead in the story is someone who collects souls of men with evil intentions, while posing as a naive woman >:)


  4. EagleAye says:

    That’s just brilliant. You really got me with the misdirection. Thanks for not being predictable. Kudos to you!


  5. RoSy says:

    Great take – but – nott such a great view…


  6. nightlake says:

    Money is the motive, as usual? the story was well written


  7. emmylgant says:

    A hint of a double helix twisty plot.. You are so clever opening and ending on a radiant smile, closing the web you wove. Vraiment tres bonne cette petite histoire. Bravo encore une fois.


  8. Penny L Howe says:

    Anelephantcan’t has really provided some food for thought with this one. Interesting take on Alastair’s photo!


  9. julespaige says:

    Oh, I think we went to similar places…a woman scorned and all that…
    And here I thought you were keeping things ‘light’.
    Fun read, indeed.


  10. Alastair says:

    Hahahaha I love it 😀

    I guess you recognise the place as you really can see France from there 😀


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