The Castle – Alastair’s Photo Fiction

AnElephantCant forget this view
He saw it just before he crossed over
When he visited his pal
Our host here Big Al
Who has a house under the White Cliffs of Dover

This is a weekly invitation to write a short piece of fiction (c. 150 words) based on a photo prompt (below) provided by Alastair.
Follow the link to see some great stories by some great writers.
But please read AnElephant’s short piece first.
You know you want to!

Copyright Alastair Forbes

Copyright Alastair Forbes

The Castle

He leads a vast army.
Yet the castle remains impregnable.
In 1,000 years it has never been taken by force.
But he knows a way.
He has a friend inside.
A friend who knows the secrets of the fortress and the rock.
Who knows the secret passage through the chalk.
They communicate using pigeons, smoke, whistles and notes on stones.
He learns of the hidden door and the key concealed in the crevice.
And the route through the tunnels to the heart of the keep.
He gathers a small band of his bravest knights.
In total darkness they scale the sheer rock face.
They enter at midnight, moving forward quietly by dim torchlight.
He is surprised when they find an iron grill, set into the walls, the floor, the ceiling.
He is even more surprised when the torrent of water crashes through the obstruction, sweeping him and his men back down the tunnel and over the cliff.
His last thought as he hurtles earthwards, gasping for air, is whether his friend was discovered and tortured, or simply betrayed him.

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13 Responses to The Castle – Alastair’s Photo Fiction

  1. RoSy says:

    Oooh goood one!
    Friend or foe?


  2. misskzebra says:

    This reminds me a lot of the history of Nottingham castle.


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  4. Penny L Howe says:

    A great read. I could have read more, an interesting storyline (well if the central character makes it)!


  5. Sarah Ann says:

    At least he won’t have too long to ponder whether he was betrayed or unfortunate. You’ve packed so much detail in without it feeling crowded – well done.


  6. julespaige says:

    Trust… That is the true hidden key.
    Nicely told, we are left wondering if the castle had the right to stand, or if the knights were really true blue…


  7. nightlake says:

    Full of action. The conqueror suppressed forever. great read


  8. zookyworld says:

    With a friend like this, who needs enemies? I really enjoyed the action in the story, following the would-be conquerors in their want to take over the castle.


  9. Gabriella says:

    I like the ending and the open explanations! Great story!


  10. lewiscave says:

    That’s no way to treat a friend 🙂


  11. Reblogged this on The Blurred Line and commented:
    Another fabulous Flash Fiction challenge. Give it a try.


  12. summerstommy2 says:

    Well constructed. I liked it.


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