Battlefield – Friday Fictioneers

AnElephantCant pretend he’s a wee dude
He is huge when he stands up to his full height
But though you only reach his knees
Remember he’s just like the trees
His bark is much worse than his bite

Once again it is Friday Fictioneer time.
Where Redwood Rochelle towers over a forest of fertile fablers on a weekly basis.
And AnElephant is rooted to the spot as usual.
The idea is to write a very short story, circa 100 words, based on this picture prompt (below).
That’s it.

Copyright-John Nixon

Copyright-John Nixon

This is such an easy position to defend.
If they think they can sneak up and take us by surprise, they’ve got another think coming.
We’ll hear them stumbling through the trees long before they see us.
They won’t be able to hold their battle lines, they’ll be all over the place.
Our generals reckon their generals will realise how hopeless their position is and turn right around and go home.
We’ll win the battle without a shot being fired and the war will be over in a couple of weeks.
And we can forget we ever heard of Shiloh.

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41 Responses to Battlefield – Friday Fictioneers

  1. Nan Falkner says:

    If only the Civil War had ended with Shiloh – This is such a good story! You amaze me with your talent and you always have a trunk full of goodies for us each week. Thanks! Nan 🙂


  2. Judah First says:

    The story was great, but I have to tell you that I almost enjoy your opening poems and introductions even more! War is definitely hell.

    Thanks for presenting a completely entertaining (and enlightening) entry. 🙂


  3. Sadly true of conflict across the world and throughout the ages. Such arrogance is what leads to trouble in the first place. You told the story very well by choosing that particular moment, when they believed in certain victory. The contrast with the outcome is stark without you having to spell it out.


    • AnElephant thanks you for your understanding, Siobhan.
      He thinks it is up to each individual to visualise for themselves the stupidity and the horror of this and, indeed, every battle ever fought.


  4. Ouch! How easily we deny the truth and live in our own denial. Those who forget the past are doomed to repeat it. I hope your story echoes loud in certain ears.


  5. Dear Elephant,

    Your story is spot on. While you don’t say if this POV is the North or the South, I believe it could’ve been either. Well done as always, Sir.




  6. A battle is still just a small part of a war… a simple solution that always complicates matter.


  7. I live in the middle of civil war country so I have enjoyed many stories from that time, yours now is included.


  8. Linda Vernon says:

    Well, it seemed like a good idea at the time! 😀


  9. Horus says:

    A Scottish Elephants war plan to turn around a mismanaged war! 😀 nice job there..


  10. Indira says:

    A link to ‘ Shiloh’ would have been helpful to understand and enjoy fully, for ignorant like me. Never knew ‘ …His bark is much worse than his bite.’


  11. Carrie says:

    reminds me of those silly Brits thinking The Great War would be over with a single cavalry charge!


  12. camgal says:

    Wow, detailed and packed..well done AnElephant, especially with the biblical reference.


  13. Your bark is much worse than your bite? 🙂 Root out that punny stuff and leaf it alone.



  14. wmqcolby says:

    It’s amazing how much of a fascination you English folk have about our War Between The States. You guys seem to nail it better than we do, historically.
    As for the story, terrific, Elephant. I always look forward to reading your stuff. Bravo!
    (Hmmm … Rochelle a REDWOOD? Maybe as a sapling …) 😀


  15. Al says:

    And it turned into a massive bloody battle anyway (I did a little research 😉 )

    A great story


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