School Gate – Alastair’s Photo Fiction

AnElephantCant quite understand this picture
With a horse and an aggressive wee fellow
Up on its back
He is under attack
By a madman who wields a deadly umbrella

This is a weekly invitation to write a short piece of fiction (c. 150 words) based on a photo prompt (below) provided by Alastair.
Follow the link to see some great stories by some great writers.
Are they better than AnElephant’s little offering?
Probably, yes!

Copyright Alastair Forbes

Copyright Alastair Forbes

School Gate

She watches nervously as he puts his rucksack behind the tree near the school gate.
He doesn’t look like a father waiting for his child.
She doesn’t recognise him, and by now she knows most of the other parents who arrive on a daily basis.
She is sure she has never seen him before.
His eyes are everywhere, as though looking for something – or someone?
She starts to dial 999 – emergency services – when he moves so fast it stuns her.
A huge gun appears in his hand, he moves towards her.
She flinches, turns away, as he fires, once, twice, four times.
As she realises she is unhurt, she sees the two men with automatic weapons fall face down from the back of the white van.

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22 Responses to School Gate – Alastair’s Photo Fiction

  1. julespaige says:

    Plucking this one from the daily news. Hard to know who to trust.
    The knights cape though does look like and umbrella 😉

    Thanks for your visit to my piece on this prompt.


  2. Aha – things are not always as they seem.. which is why eyewitnesses to crimes are apparently so unreliable (so I am told!).


  3. EagleAye says:

    So shocking! Love to know more about her unexpected rescuer. Clever misdirect as always, sir elephant.


  4. Penny L Howe says:

    Yes, they are always better with AnElephants offerings! 🙂 xo


  5. nightlake says:

    He was her saviour. great twist


  6. high five and raspberries says:

    C’est formidable M. L’elephant..I hope the story is to be many unanswered questions


  7. What I got from this story is how aware the child is. I’m glad she wasn’t hurt or snatched.


  8. Eric Alagan says:

    Leaves one with many unanswered questions – is there a sequel, I wonder.

    But from her POV – summed up very nicely, I reckon 🙂


  9. Wow, great story and an awesome twist at the end. I always love reading your work.


  10. summerstommy2 says:

    Excellent Sir elephant, you caught me unawares, fantastic actually.


  11. emmylgant says:

    Great short-short… with the required body count, only not the one we expected! 🙂
    I love your twists and misdirections, just too much fun.


  12. Al says:

    The unknown protector. An excellent story with an excellent twist.

    I thank AnElephant for taking part


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