LAX – Friday Fictioneers

AnElephantCant be in a movie
Although he has a quite marvellous talent for acting
He is a Hollywood star
Like his cousin Babar
If he does not find cameras and lights so distracting

Once again it is Friday Fictioneer time.
Film Magnate Rochelle directs a star-studded screenplay of  scribblers to produce some sensational scripts.
And AnElephant tries to avoid a Golden Raspberry.
The idea is to write a very short story, circa 100 words, based on this picture prompt (below).
That’s it.

Copyright-Rochelle Wisoff-Fields

Copyright-Rochelle Wisoff-Fields


The two men sit in Los Angeles Airport, just watching.
They see people arriving and departing, tears of sadness and of joy.
They are particularly interested in the queues at security.
Women carrying their shoes, men with their belts in a tray holding up their trousers with one hand.
It is hot.
Scanners are beeping, hands are patting down large sweaty bodies, tempers are fraying.
This is like a Charlie Chaplin comedy, says one.
Yes, but so necessary, his friend replies.
But the travellers are so impatient, how long will they tolerate this inconvenience?
Until just before our next attack.

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22 Responses to LAX – Friday Fictioneers

  1. Nan Falkner says:

    Dear Elephant, I enjoy your writings each week so much! Clever and smart writing is thought provoking and well, I just love it! Fun to read. Nan 🙂


  2. Caerlynn Nash says:

    Like a few others, I wondered if the two men were terrorists. Well written. Nice to have the possibilities.


  3. That’s the tension, between inconvenience and at least the illusion of safety. Hopefully all the humiliation and time wasted has done something positive. Nice take on this.


  4. Bastet says:

    Interesting take .. nothing like watching the TSA at work!


  5. You have captured my fear too accurately. When you least expect it, expect it.


  6. You described the airport experience to a T. Kudos!


  7. Sandra says:

    Good story, well done.


  8. I’d feel more like the security inconveniences were necessary if most of the possible terrorists hadn’t made it through security and were stopped by passengers. Nicely done, especially with the question of whether they are two men just watching or two terrorists just watching…for now…just left up to us.



  9. Nicely done, but sinister.


  10. wmqcolby says:

    Good descriptions and storyline to boot. How you do it, I’d love to know, Elephant.
    I like that one description of the guys holding their pants up with one hand! Don’t they know that’s the style now? 😀


  11. Dear Elephant,

    So are these two terrorists at LAX? You’ve described the airport experience to a T. Worse than LAX, though is Dulles in Washington DC.

    I’ve come to enjoy your intros as much as your stories. They’re always so much fun to read. Nicely done on both counts.




    • Potentially so, just waiting for the moment when the guard drops due to public pressure.
      And thank you, AnElephant is first and foremost a childish rhymer, who thinks that silly is fun.
      And he loves to be appreciated for that.


  12. dmmacilroy says:

    Dear AEC,

    Humankind. A contradiction in terms in a never ending story. Very well done.




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